血月
原來月亮同我們一樣
都是血肉之軀
都來自母親
充滿痛苦與歡樂的
子宮
但她得天獨厚
每隔幾年便回到
宇宙母親的肚子裡
哇哇重生
血的洗禮
讓她在億萬年之後
仍明亮如初
注：今年中秋夜恰逢超級月蝕（所謂的血月。要看下一個血月得等到2033年）。半夜裡被從窗口射入的明亮月光叫醒，起來寫詩。
BLOOD MOON
it turns out the moon is just like us
flesh and blood
all coming from Mother's womb
full of pain
and joy
what makes her different
is that every few years
she goes back to the womb
of the Cosmic Mother
to be born again
after the baptism of blood
billions of years later
she is as bright
as new
* This year's Mid-Autumn Festival and Supermoon Lunar Eclipse (Blood Moon) both occurred on the same day (September 27, 2015).
台灣詩學‧吹鼓吹詩論壇
诗肠鼓吹，吹响诗号，鼓动诗潮／1992年创社‧代表台湾新世代新势力网络诗场域(2003~2021)
血月 BLOOD MOON
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Re: 血月 BLOOD MOON
由 若爾。諾爾 發表於 2015-12-17,2:29 pm
I don't know what is a blood moon and thus googled to find it out.
I am pleased that this poem teaches me something about the lunar eclipse but am disappointed that I missed the date: September 27-28, 2015!
This is a nice poem about our mother nature. It coins with the term "blood moon" to describe a very unique phenomena and sentiment. No critical view but I would likely add either a conjunction or an article (as shown in parenthesis below) so that the line above and below flows more smoothly. Just a shallow thought.
"it turns out the moon is just like us
(______) flesh and blood
all coming from Mother's womb
full of pain
and joy"
My sincere regards to Dr. Marr. Merry Christmas!
I am pleased that this poem teaches me something about the lunar eclipse but am disappointed that I missed the date: September 27-28, 2015!
This is a nice poem about our mother nature. It coins with the term "blood moon" to describe a very unique phenomena and sentiment. No critical view but I would likely add either a conjunction or an article (as shown in parenthesis below) so that the line above and below flows more smoothly. Just a shallow thought.
"it turns out the moon is just like us
(______) flesh and blood
all coming from Mother's womb
full of pain
and joy"
My sincere regards to Dr. Marr. Merry Christmas!
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Re: 血月 BLOOD MOON
由 marrfei 發表於 2015-12-17,11:32 pm
若爾。諾爾 寫:I don't know what is a blood moon and thus googled to find it out.
I am pleased that this poem teaches me something about the lunar eclipse but am disappointed that I missed the date: September 27-28, 2015!
This is a nice poem about our mother nature. It coins with the term "blood moon" to describe a very unique phenomena and sentiment. No critical view but I would likely add either a conjunction or an article (as shown in parenthesis below) so that the line above and below flows more smoothly. Just a shallow thought.
"it turns out the moon is just like us
(______) flesh and blood
all coming from Mother's womb
full of pain
and joy"
My sincere regards to Dr. Marr. Merry Christmas!
Thank you, 若爾。諾爾。 是個好主意，加個 “of” 如何？
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