台灣詩學‧吹鼓吹詩論壇

"After Work" by Rob Chen, Translated by Rob Chen
〈下班後〉羅拔／羅拔翻譯

我把我與詩壓在枕頭下
一覺　我醒來
詩卻碎了

I laid my head and my poem under the pillow
After nap I woke up
But the poem broke apart

1st line: 問: 壓可有bury之意嗎？
2nd line: I woke up after a nap
3rd line: my poem

淺見供學習和分享~

諾爾問好羅拔（你總是那麽早起身！），日安咯！

我覺得若爾建議的bury很好很生活。但第二次我會譯成 I woke up from my nap ，你的中文版「覺」和「我」之間有一個停頓的位置，我覺得也應該譯出來，第三句，我覺得the poem是可以的，因為第一句已說了my。

我把我與詩壓在枕頭下
一覺　我醒來
詩卻碎了

I buried myself and my poem under the pillow
From my nap I woke up
And the poem had broken apart

若爾。諾爾 寫:1st line: 問: 壓可有bury之意嗎？
2nd line: I woke up after a nap
3rd line: my poem

淺見供學習和分享~

諾爾問好羅拔（你總是那麽早起身！），日安咯！

兩位版主的建議甚好，萬分感謝！全詩修如下：

"After Work" by Rob Chen, Translated by Rob Chen
〈下班後〉羅拔／羅拔翻譯

我把我與詩壓在枕頭下
一覺　我醒來
詩卻碎了

I buried myself and my poem under the pillow
From my nap I woke up
And the poem had broken apart