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〈夜〉羅拔/羅拔翻譯
"Night" by Rob Chen, translated by Rob Chen

Darkness swallows my room,
I get on a sweet dream, gently sail away.

黑，吃了臥室
我乘一艘美夢，輕悄遠走

短句對羅拔真是太簡單啦，來點長詩哦！

未句部份 ，gently sail away，如果譯成「輕帆遠走」是否更貼近英文的意思呢？

羅拔 寫:〈夜〉羅拔/羅拔翻譯
"Night" by Rob Chen, translated by Rob Chen

Darkness swallows my room,
I get on a sweet dream, gently sail away.

黑，吃了臥室
我乘一艘美夢，輕悄遠走

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〈夜〉羅拔/羅拔翻譯
"Night" by Rob Chen, translated by Rob Chen

Darkness swallows my room,
I get on a sweet dream, gently sail away.

黑，吃了臥室
我乘一艘美夢，輕帆遠走