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貓(Cat)

文章發表於 : 2013-04-13,9:12 pm
羅拔
"Cat" by Rob Chen, Translated by Rob Chen
〈貓〉羅拔/羅拔翻譯

她不曾理睬我的呼喚
這回卻輕輕走向我
身旁的碗

She never responsed my call
But this time she slowly walks toward me
For the bowl besides me

Re: 貓(Cat)

文章發表於 : 2013-04-13,9:58 pm
詹倪
羅拔 寫:She never responsed my call


應該是responded唷~~

Re: 貓(Cat)

文章發表於 : 2013-04-13,10:15 pm
詹倪
大概是s在d旁邊所以打錯字了吧哈哈

版主大大可以幫忙改一下嗎?? :?

Re: 貓(Cat)

文章發表於 : 2013-04-13,11:53 pm
不清
Response好像太拘謹了。把「她不曾理睬我的呼喚」譯成「She never pays much attention to me」如何,這樣就有點你暗戀的女子不曾睄你一眼的感覺。 :D

Re: 貓(Cat)

文章發表於 : 2013-04-15,8:44 pm
羅拔
不好意思!確實是筆誤-是responded才對,感謝詹倪的糾正!
也感謝不清的建議,與原譯各異其趣!

羅拔敬上

Re: 貓(Cat)

文章發表於 : 2013-04-22,1:17 pm
羅拔
修改的兩種版本如下:

"Cat" by Rob Chen, Translated by Rob Chen
〈貓〉羅拔/羅拔翻譯

她不曾理睬我的呼喚
這回卻輕輕走向我
身旁的碗

Revised Version 1:

She never responded to my call
But this time she slowly walks toward me
For the bowl besides me

Revised Version 2:
She never pays attention to my call
But this time she slowly walks toward me
For the bowl besides me