为两个芝加哥小女孩写的两首小诗

[marrfei]

为两个芝加哥小女孩写的两首小诗，英文版张贴于《新新闻诗》，2016年9月4日


这是多年前因看到了芝加哥黑人区几乎每天都发生的悲剧而写成的。最近这悲剧似乎变本加厉，几乎每天都有无辜的居民因帮派争夺地盘发生枪战而伤亡，所以把它们寄给了这个专门发表同最新的新闻有关的诗网页。下面是这两首诗的中文版：


＜初潮＞


小女孩在路上被崎岖绊了一跤
正巧碰上一颗呼啸而过的流弹


红色的血潮汩汩自她尚未成熟的身体涌出
渐僵的嘴还有话要问呼天抢地而来的母亲

MENARCHE

Stumbling on a bumpy sidewalk
a little girl was hit by a stray bullet

Blood gushed from her immature body
Her stiffening mouth had yet to ask girlish questions
of her wailing mother




＜跳房子＞


又一个小女孩
挡住了
子弹漫游的方向


血泊的人行道上
围观者清楚看到
小女孩嘴边
压抑不住的胜利微笑
她的双脚
终於成功地跳入
粉笔涂画的
两个方格

HOPSCOTCH

Standing in the way
of a bullet’s joyflight
another little girl fell
on a blood-stained pavement

A triumphant smile
crossed her twisted face
as she finally managed
to plant both feet
neatly
in the chalked squares




下面是《新新闻诗》NEW VERSE NEWS 网页的链接：

TWO LITTLE POEMS FOR TWO LITTLE CHICAGO GIRLS by William Marr
http://newversenews.blogspot.com/2016/0 ... icago.html

[若爾。諾爾]

Both mini poems drip with irony, intertwining child’s play with violent death. “Menarche” as a title is cynical.

For the Hopscotch poem, perhaps I would consider something in the parenthesis below, what do you think?

Standing in the way
of a bullet’s joyflight (joyride)
another little girl fell
on a (the) blood-stained pavement

Warm regards to Dr. Marr, enjoy autumn

为两个芝加哥小女孩写的两首小诗，英文版张贴于《新新闻诗》，2016年9月4日


这是多年前因看到了芝加哥黑人区几乎每天都发生的悲剧而写成的。最近这悲剧似乎变本加厉，几乎每天都有无辜的居民因帮派争夺地盘发生枪战而伤亡，所以把它们寄给了这个专门发表同最新的新闻有关的诗网页。下面是这两首诗的中文版：


＜初潮＞


小女孩在路上被崎岖绊了一跤
正巧碰上一颗呼啸而过的流弹


红色的血潮汩汩自她尚未成熟的身体涌出
渐僵的嘴还有话要问呼天抢地而来的母亲

MENARCHE

Stumbling on a bumpy sidewalk
a little girl was hit by a stray bullet

Blood gushed from her immature body
Her stiffening mouth had yet to ask girlish questions
of her wailing mother




＜跳房子＞


又一个小女孩
挡住了
子弹漫游的方向


血泊的人行道上
围观者清楚看到
小女孩嘴边
压抑不住的胜利微笑
她的双脚
终於成功地跳入
粉笔涂画的
两个方格

HOPSCOTCH

Standing in the way
of a bullet’s joyflight
another little girl fell
on a blood-stained pavement

A triumphant smile
crossed her twisted face
as she finally managed
to plant both feet
neatly
in the chalked squares




下面是《新新闻诗》NEW VERSE NEWS 网页的链接：

TWO LITTLE POEMS FOR TWO LITTLE CHICAGO GIRLS by William Marr
http://newversenews.blogspot.com/2016/0 ... icago.html

[marrfei]

Both mini poems drip with irony, intertwining child’s play with violent death. “Menarche” as a title is cynical.

For the Hopscotch poem, perhaps I would consider something in the parenthesis below, what do you think?

Standing in the way
of a bullet’s joyflight (joyride)
another little girl fell
on a (the) blood-stained pavement

Warm regards to Dr. Marr, enjoy autumn

为两个芝加哥小女孩写的两首小诗，英文版张贴于《新新闻诗》，2016年9月4日


这是多年前因看到了芝加哥黑人区几乎每天都发生的悲剧而写成的。最近这悲剧似乎变本加厉，几乎每天都有无辜的居民因帮派争夺地盘发生枪战而伤亡，所以把它们寄给了这个专门发表同最新的新闻有关的诗网页。下面是这两首诗的中文版：


＜初潮＞


小女孩在路上被崎岖绊了一跤
正巧碰上一颗呼啸而过的流弹


红色的血潮汩汩自她尚未成熟的身体涌出
渐僵的嘴还有话要问呼天抢地而来的母亲

MENARCHE

Stumbling on a bumpy sidewalk
a little girl was hit by a stray bullet

Blood gushed from her immature body
Her stiffening mouth had yet to ask girlish questions
of her wailing mother




＜跳房子＞


又一个小女孩
挡住了
子弹漫游的方向


血泊的人行道上
围观者清楚看到
小女孩嘴边
压抑不住的胜利微笑
她的双脚
终於成功地跳入
粉笔涂画的
两个方格

HOPSCOTCH

Standing in the way
of a bullet’s joyflight
another little girl fell
on a blood-stained pavement

A triumphant smile
crossed her twisted face
as she finally managed
to plant both feet
neatly
in the chalked squares




下面是《新新闻诗》NEW VERSE NEWS 网页的链接：

TWO LITTLE POEMS FOR TWO LITTLE CHICAGO GIRLS by William Marr
http://newversenews.blogspot.com/2016/0 ... icago.html

謝謝諾爾的好建議。joyflight是我從joyride變化而來的自創，flight 可能比 ride 更快也更有自主性。用on a blood-stained pavement 是因為那裡有許多blood-stained pavements, 這只是其中之一。

[若爾。諾爾]

明白了，我同意原創之想法。

問好老師，敬祝秋安～